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the crows have taken their pound of flesh and eaten it raw,
dragging their voices down the chalkboard sky.
medicated, i watch them feed with empty Auschwitz eyes,
every day is the same claustrophobic affair over again.

i miss the taste of axenic fear in my throat,
but my new world is monochrome and i am forced to swallow their synthetic ambrosia.
twisted into my fetal pose, i mark the walls misted from my metric breath,
they say those in glass houses.. but i have no stones to throw
or i would waste this crystal mausoleum from the inside.

they nailed my wings to the floor,
they keep me tranquilized and tell me this is home.
the shower drains are clotted with famous last words,
this is where savages and wandering savants come to die.
i am the leaden albatross around my own neck,
my metamorphosis brought me here.
rewrite from Feb 2012

i don't own the photo

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:iconmambasnake:
mambasnake Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
very descriptive, and dark.
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013   General Artist
Wow.Very descriptive and powerful. I really love this piece.
Well formed and structured.
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you :)
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013   General Artist
:)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
great piece. vivid and dark.

good reading by *Hfeather53, too.
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks, and yes she did a great job with the reading
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:iconmune-san:
Mune-san Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful. I love it~
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks i'm glad you like it.
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:iconmozartsnemesis:
MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
Nicely done.

Favorite line: "medicated, i watch them feed with empty Auschwitz eyes,"
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks :)
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:iconbittasweetcandy:
BittaSweetCandy Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student General Artist
:clap: Wonderful imagery!
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you :)
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BittaSweetCandy Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Student General Artist
:)
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:iconkyphoscoliosis:
kyphoscoliosis Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
This is fantastic.
Why the hell is it in OvaryPuncher :/
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks :) and idk, somebody added it and i accepted the invitation.
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:iconhappy001:
happy001 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
Bitter Seeds by Ian Tregillis ck it out :)
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i have never read it but i will definitely look it up, thank you
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:iconstarkpretty:
Starkpretty Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
Bloody hell, this is good!

It made me think of a being trapped between times and kept locked up in an asylum, so it can be studied, and its awareness is of two places at once.

Just amazing.
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you! i actually tried to write it from the perspective of an asylum inmate, so props for interpretation. cheers
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Starkpretty Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
:D you're very welcome... ironically enough, I've been browsing through Urbex-type photos at the minute, and completely have the bug. You evoked all of those creepy, haunted photos in one flash.
no problem!!!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
All I can is, "Fuck."

And I literally said that outloud.

Your imagery is amazing. It pulls you in. Nicely done.
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you very much for the audible Fuck :D much appreciated, cheers
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:iconhfeather53:
Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're quite welcome. I should be the one thanking you. ;)
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol it's not THAT good. i flipped through your gallery, you're a great writer yourself :)
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:iconhfeather53:
Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're silly. This poem is amazing. Thank you for the compliment. :hug:
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ha well thanks and no problem
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:iconhappy001:
happy001 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012
A chilling reflection from a very good book, nice poetry.
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you.... what book are you talking about though?
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student Writer
Such infinite depth in your imagery!
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krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i just looked through your gallery, you're one to talk lol awesome sauce
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you :D
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Spagettimoon Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Great work. Really Great x)
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thx very much :)
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Spagettimoon Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yw :)
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prussia-the-awehsome Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I usually never read anything that the deviant has promoted with art that isn't theirs. But the title was really interesting and the poetry is really beautiful and descriptive. The word choice and subject is stunning, and just everything is fucking gorgeous!! I'm really glad I decided to look past the picture because the poetry is amazing!
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well thank you, i'm glad you decided to read it :)
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:iconcrashmypartyhard:
crashmypartyhard Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
deep and meaningful. very cool!
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks :)
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crashmypartyhard Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
np (:
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student Writer
This poem is very strong! ^^ The descriptions are great, and I like your choice of words overall. Excellent work!
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you, much appreciated :D
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:iconbelarosewolf:
BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome! :D
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SpiritWolfSong Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012
beautiful imagery
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you :)
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1997dragonclaw Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student General Artist
Hehehehe.... why do I find this so entertaining?
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol glad you like it :P
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Cinnamonfox Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love the imagery you've used :)
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:iconkrutch99:
krutch99 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you :) i actually like the way this one turned out
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Cinnamonfox Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
np :D It's really good, you should definitely be proud of it :)
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