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she sells 9mm shells by the seashore,
says she can hear the ocean.
but if you listen close to these shells
you can hear ghosts.

something borrowed, something blue,
something broken, something bruised.

she traces her fingers across the autopsy scars
while she counts her bones like currency.
she'll leave your skin screaming,
and sink into the whites of your eyes like a shipwreck.
can you hear the ocean?
haven't written anything in so long, i miss it

wow this got a DD? thanks everyone lol thanks to Halatia and neurotype for the feature
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Given 2014-02-24
Beautifully alliterative, disturbingly evocative. Dysphoria by krutch99 ( Suggested by Halatia and Featured by neurotype )
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CalleighBlack Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't even have the words to tell you how good this is. :faint:
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is a very nice piece.  Congrats on the DD.
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experi-Mental-Life Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I love this! It reminds me of my old work.. They're on here somewhere, I just don't remember the username I used... Ha.. Sorry for rambeling, now I sort of miss writing poetry, only a little.
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014   Writer

Congratulations on your DD. I never would have thought listening to a seashell would bring out a poem like this.

It's well-written and imaginative beyond what I thought when I listened to a seashell. I only heard an echo of the sea and ghosts.

Maybe it ...sank into the whites of your [my] eyes like a shipwreck...

Mostly I hear the ghosts you wrote about and I'm glad to read about them. Thank you.

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Trippy4U Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
:thumbsup:
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XenAshwood Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow this is creepy. Tipped hat to you sir.
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JWA2277 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Nicely done!
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Deaditez Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student Writer
haunting and beautiful.
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THeMaDwalKer Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student General Artist
wow, such poetry, so beautiful.
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MissGhastly Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Love the imagery here :) congrats on the daily feature!
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Destiny3000 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nicely done!
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littlemecupcakes Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Loved it <3
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KittuPaladin Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Reminds me of my high school poetry class. There were many dark goth writing poets in there. Great times, thanks for the lovely memory <3
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Nixon4lyfe Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Professional
Get a real man's round next time chump. 7.62x45 or .50 gyrojet for instance.
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RhynWilliams Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014   Traditional Artist
such a haunting poem, such power in the words! 
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation! :clap:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :party:
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Meisaims Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Beautiful. Very beautiful. Thank you.
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AlbertStClare Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014   Writer
You might have been going somewhere interesting, but teeter off the Brink into Nonsense in the last three Lines.
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I like it.
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AnimusArgentis Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Evocative, but... Very poorly written. I was editing as I read, and not just for grammar. That's not good.
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Halatia Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Professional Writer
Poetry, man. Grammar is used for style.
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AnimusArgentis Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I've been published for poetry since I was 12. Never used it as an excuse for weird syntax and bad grammar.
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BlissBaby13 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student General Artist
Beautiful imagery, unsettling too  - really, really love it.
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Yedoch Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Congrats on the DD! Glad it led me to your work. That's some comeback to writing for sure!
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your-methamphetamine Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Student Writer
what a brilliant twist.
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krutch99 Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks :)
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Rodegas Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013
I don't get it.
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VFreie Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013
Best ghost story I've read in a while. That first stanza in particular is just great.
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Edges-to-Everything Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013
Powerful, creative, surprising, nicely written.
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